TOFA 2008
Round 1
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Theme: Finish the story - "Bob wanted an apple, so he..."
Began: Monday, June 23 @ 12:15 AM (Eastern Time)
Ended: Friday, July 11 @ 12:15 AM (Eastern Time)
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Participants:
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	Judge Comments:
	Thor, Clod of Blunders  Click Here
	NitWitt I love your interpretation on the theme, and you're also good at facial expressions. The artwork throughout was a bit simple though, and some parts were far too choppy (ie. The mom suddenly turned around). It was really nice to see something new from you, though. Good job.
	KitKat  Kind of an abrupt ending.

	No Submission...

	Judge Comments:
	Thor, Clod of Blunders  Click Here
	NitWitt Overall you did a descent job on this entry. The biggest issue I saw was with your storytelling - I couldn't tell what half of the animation had to do with anything else in the animation. The quote at the start, the ghosts warning, and some other things didn't seem to have any role in the animation. It also seems like you tried really hard to bend a story you already had into the theme. Even so, the "apple" aspect didn't play much of a role either. On the plus side, I did find the "DI DI DIIII" and the kidney comment pretty funny. Your animation skills are nice, especially when it comes to body language and expressions. However, your drawing on this piece could have used a bit of work.
	KitKat As always, nice work on backgrounds and effects. The story just seemed disjointed to me.

	Judge Comments:
	Thor, Clod of Blunders  Click Here
	NitWitt You and I both know that you have the ability to blow everyone away. Amazing story, incredible art and design (the tree in particular), and you kept me interested the whole time. Excellent job with making the characters come to life as well.
	KitKat  Nice depart from your usual style.

	Judge Comments:
	Thor, Clod of Blunders  Click Here
	NitWitt To start, kudos to you for not stressing over voice-actors. I like the style you have going, although it is a little bit sloppily drawn. The biggest error I see in this flash is the sudden cut to the vent, then the cut to the apple stand. There's too much missing between these shots, and it's difficult to figure out the whole story that way. With animation, I would say use less tweens. I can see you're well on your way to being a good animator, keep it up!
	KitKat It feels unfinished, like the animation left too many questions unanswered.

	Judge Comments:
	Thor, Clod of Blunders  Click Here
	NitWitt I think you certainly have something going with your drawing ability. It was a little sloppy, but I dig the style and the shading. With an amusing plot to go with it, you did a fairly nice job on this piece.
	KitKat I like that it sounds like a child telling a story.

	No Submission...

	Judge Comments:
	Thor, Clod of Blunders  Click Here
	NitWitt While everything seems rather simple, it's got a very distinct and likable style. The animation is probably your best quality, it's all very smooth and often times silly. I think you could have done more with the theme than "Hey I'm Bob I want an apple", but it still turned out nice.
	KitKat I lol’d. But I wanted to see what the evil apple at the register would do.

Detailed Results		NitWitt	Thor	Slice Dr.	Kitkat		Total	Average
	Artwork / Design	6	4	6	8		24	6
	Animation	7	5	7	8		27	6.75
	Originality	10	7	9	10		36	9
	Entertainment	8	6	6	9		29	7.25
	Flow	6	6	6	6		24	6
	Total	37	28	34	41		140
	Artwork / Design	5	6	6	8		25	6.25
	Animation	9	5	8	7		29	7.25
	Originality	4	7	6	10		27	6.75
	Entertainment	5	6	8	8		27	6.75
	Flow	8	6	5	5		24	6
	Total	31	28	33	38		130
	Artwork / Design	10	10	10	10		40	10
	Animation	9	10	10	10		39	9.75
	Originality	10	10	10	10		40	10
	Entertainment	9	9	10	9		37	9.25
	Flow	10	9	9	10		38	9.5
	Total	48	48	49	49		194
	Artwork / Design	5	6	1	7		19	4.75
	Animation	3	5	1	7		16	4
	Originality	7	6	6	7		26	6.5
	Entertainment	7	5	3	5		20	5
	Flow	3	6	9	4		22	5.5
	Total	25	28	20	30		103
	Artwork / Design	7	4	2	7		20	5
	Animation	5	3	1	7		16	4
	Originality	7	5	2	8		22	5.5
	Entertainment	5	3	3	7		18	4.5
	Flow	4	3	1	5		13	3.25
	Total	28	18	9	34		89
	Artwork / Design	7	9	7	9		32	8
	Animation	8	9	9	10		36	9
	Originality	3	10	8	9		30	7.5
	Entertainment	9	9	10	10		38	9.5
	Flow	6	9	10	7		32	8
	Total	33	46	44	45		168